Friday, 9 April 2021

The Tunnel Writing Prompt 1 2021 OLIVER





 there is a waterfall the kids looks at the waterfall

They are eating food at the same time and have a stitches

At the waterfall 1 kid was pulled into the water with a crash and a bang ding and a dong a child and a drink bottle fell down the river no one can stop them or hold her and the water bottle. 


This is my tunnel writing prompt 1

in progress

what do you think about it ?

do you like?

blog you later

Oliver

3 comments:

  1. Hi my name Kaito from Room 7. I like your writing because it has the really good and amazing words in bold. Tip: On the question where it says "do you like?" you should add a "my writing" it will sound like this: "do you like my writing" so that when someone else comments on your blog they will know what you are talking about. Bye blog ya later!

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  2. HI my name is ramona from room 25 owairaka school i really liked it by the way and i hope you can do more like this bye Ramona.

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  3. Kia ora Oliver. I love your beautiful describing about the kids looking at the waterfall. Maybe next time you should describe what the kids feel and check to make sure it makes sense. Blog ya later!!!

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